Thursday, March 17, 2011

In the article t(Hype) .The author Kalle lasn states that advertisement and commercials are playing a significant role in our lives. Whatever this role is bad or good on society, it affects us tremendously. I agree with the author that adv and commercials are playing  a very important role in our lives .
               Advertisements are the main source of pollution to brains functions.Our brains are loaded by millions and millions of adv every day. Anywhere we go , our eyes are faced with commercials.Commercials companies are targeting the young kids even in their schools.No way to run from adv . We lost the enjoyment of life because of commercials.  
               Firstly, according to the article advertisement are the main source of pollution for our mental health and  our brain functions.It consider harmful for the environment. Our brains are flooded with  a huge amount of adv every day . According to the author, it is estimated 12 billions display adv, 3 millions radio commercials and more than 200.000 TV commercials are presented daily. These numbers are limited only to the united states.
               Additionally,  People are faced with adv almost every day. The moment our eyes are open until we go to bed , thousands of them are advertised all over. According to the passage. Comm are everywhere,in subways, buses, taxis, billboards and stadiums.The only thing that people see or hear or watch is adv .On my way to work. I take the subway , during my ride, I try to rest my head and close my eyes because I want to avoid looking to them , but no way.There are inside the subways cars, all over the subways walls. It is overwhelming the majority of them. Even in streets , they use people bodies to advertise on to let people pay attention to one of the stores or to a new item will be presented.
              Further more, adv contributed to obesity and violence among teenagers, this is due to the fact that tremendous amount of  adv and comm are presented to them. Also due to the fact that young people  are targeted from the owners of the adv companies because they spent more time on TV or on playing video games . This is so harmful for our young generations. While ago I watched in the news that a mother of a young girl sued McDonald because her girl refuse to eat anything except the meal that presented in McDonald.This id due to the TV commercials.
              Finley, adv are playing tremendous role in ruining people lives. It is the reason for losing the enjoyment of life  for a lot of people .The beautiful of life is lost by adv and commercials.
  

1 comment:

  1. 1. Overall, the author is doing good.
    2. The essay is over 400 words. It is good.
    3. Yes, the author has a clear claim which she says that ads and commercials are playing a very important role in our lives.
    4. yes, the author has a clear introduction by summerize the whole eassy.
    5. Yes, the author symmerizes the reading clearly.
    6. Yes, the author responts to the reading with her own life as an example.
    7. The writing is easy to read and clear. There some sentences might be a litter bit long, you might cut it shorter or use commer to two sentences.

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